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Whisper

I
Perseverance comes in the flesh,
not:
     Pill, injection, inhalation.
But as my grave settles
from the hard night's rest,
     (spade, and that menthol chill)
     I'll turn to all the wrong things
     and I'll say farewell.
Fare thee well...
As I light up again,
     I will puff you away
     And I will puff you away

II
Solace is a dream for those who
identified that poor vein of misery that
is pride from the moment they swallowed
their first gasp of air

To banish his vanity as the world's chokes him,
Adam lies down...


III
A battle for fulfillment
laid to rest in the ashes of
commitment-

and all he had to say was hello-
this is it, the calling:

I am powerless without you-
the sanctity of my heart wakes feeble.
But we are mere ghosts in a design
the designer cannot control.

And I will whisper its name:

     Chaos
     Chaos...

IV
Take a bow for the reclamation
and make a toast for your god.
It is not salvation, it is well brewed
tragedy-and I will whisper that promise:

I love you
     Never let go...

For my angel's name 'taint "Eve."

V
We are all puppets of
our darkest desires

     And I will fight tragedy,
     I will fight the inevitable...


Flatline is not a tragedy,
it is a whisper from chaos;
a return to normalcy.

     My love yearns for that supple
     kiss of love once more,
     but I have puffed you away,
     again.

May that menthol kiss caress
not only my senses,
but my lips and soul, so I may
embrace your purity again
      when you have left my arms in finality.

For I miss you
and was never the wiser,

my Angel.
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Author's Comments

But that that was taken was never mine to have

and that that was given was never mine to have

may your love guide me to peace so that the outcome of this writing may never be realized

:heart:

edit1: Sorry, submitted at 3 in the morning. Consequentially, typos were plentiful. Fixed.

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:iconshadzofsilver:
This piece is quiet, and hard to find a place to sit still in to read it. This chills me to the bone, it's haunting, really. I'm failing at describing this...


Yeah, and you need to quit smoking, those things will kill you.

--
-M@
:icongodatesomesatan:
Is it quiet, as in it fails to grab you?

Cause that would suck. But then again, I don't know.

And I know I should quit, but I don't know if I want to yet >_>
:iconstarsamuraigirl:
Okay now that I'm half awake I shall comment.

This piece is exactly the type of thing I enjoy, a thought provoking piece of literature. I love the line "But we are mere ghosts in a design
the designer cannot control"

I can make you quit. I can be quite violent according to the person that I kicked apparently harder than I intended. They still have a bruise...

Okay I hope that came out alright. I'm still kind of sleepy.

--
One Person. One Dog. One Team.

A service dog makes the best therapist. They are available 24/7, never breach confidentiality, and they don't charge you for listening.
:icongodatesomesatan:
So it's good? Any ideas about how it lacks? I'm kind of unsure about this piece. And depending on how you look at it, it's more fiction than anything.
:iconstarsamuraigirl:
Yes it is very good. I'm reading it over again and really I don't know what to say as far as where it lacks. It's very thought provoking and I truly enjoy it.

I'm always unsure about my work. I still don't like the poster I did at work the other day but everyone else loved it...

--
One Person. One Dog. One Team.

A service dog makes the best therapist. They are available 24/7, never breach confidentiality, and they don't charge you for listening.
:icongodatesomesatan:
Well thank you... I'll have to check that out as well. I don't get much internet time where I am now...
:iconstarsamuraigirl:
Where are you? You can send me an e-mail if you don't feel like sharing it here.

--
One Person. One Dog. One Team.

A service dog makes the best therapist. They are available 24/7, never breach confidentiality, and they don't charge you for listening.
:iconstarsamuraigirl:
I'd like to be in Georgia right now... I'd like to be anywhere but here right now. Oh well I am here better at least try to be happy right?

--
One Person. One Dog. One Team.

A service dog makes the best therapist. They are available 24/7, never breach confidentiality, and they don't charge you for listening.

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